Sunday 11 September 2016

Formal Email

To: Brad Blackstone
From: Samuel Rajendran
Date: 12 September 2016
Subject: My Introduction

Dear Brad,

This e-mail serves as a purpose to introduce myself, my educational background, goals for studying in this SIT programme and my aims for the future. I’m R Samuel S/O Rajendran. I’m 23 years old, an Indian and a Protestant by faith.

I graduated with a Diploma in Information Technology from Singapore Polytechnic (SP) in 2014 before I went on to serve my National Service (NS). During my polytechnic days, I was taught designing, programming and networking. I was very much interested in designing and networking compared to programming as I found it repetitious.

From a completely different educational background, my friends tend to question me on why I’m into engineering (building services) when I could easily get a course related to my diploma. I aim to be an engineer working under the sector of the Building and Construction Authority (BCA) in Singapore. I was always fascinated by this industry due to my father who used to be a civil engineer. Thus, I applied and enrolled into this current course of mine in SIT.

My goals are to do well in every module taken in every trimester. I would want to upgrade myself both academically and in my interpersonal skills. Communication is very essential in our everyday life. I look forward to your next lessons to improve my communication skills. I’m appreciative in learning your module, Effective Communication, which I believe would nurture me as a person who would be preferred by companies that requires good communication skills

Thank you for taking your time to read my email.

Yours sincerely
Samuel Rajendran

Revised on 18/09/2016 (7:19am)

1 comment:

  1. Thank you, Samuel, for this informative formal letter. You do a clear and comprehensive job of introducing yourself.

    I have a few comments on your language use:

    1) interested into >>> interested in

    2) From a completely different education background, many... >>> (It sounds as though "many" are from a different background.)

    3) My goals for studying in this programme is... >>> subject-verb agreement

    4) I always look forward to your lessons to improve my communication skills. >>> This is only moderately since you have only attended on lesson so far. :)

    5) protestant by faith >>> capitalization

    6) I’m appreciative in learning your module Effective Communication which I believe would nurture me as a person who would be preferred by the society. >>> punctuation
    I’m appreciative in learning your module, Effective Communication, which I believe would nurture me as a person who would be preferred by the society. (or at the very least, by companies that require good comm skills)

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